This my shit
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This my shit
who am i you ask read and you'll see a completly diferent side of me and the way i was originally
My mind is ripped torn and shattered
my soul beaten and battered
my thoughts are not straight but skattered
i blame the world
for every word
that comes out of my mouth
as my thoughts head south
screams of murderer as I walk down the street
I mean by the way I'm so broke I barely get money to eat
these stone walls
are the only things i feel when experience the falls
of the life i was given
with me the dead have truly risen
i'll never become nothing
thats what my parents tell me
if thats true why all i see is suffering
on the streets in the news
shildren runnin down the streets with no shoes
who's fault is that who's?
i got these bye baby blues
in this game of life there is only one option
LOSE
come near me
you won't like what you see
you try to hurt my family
son't get by my side
you'll soon learn this jekyll doesn't hide
don't act like you take pain in stride
your problem is you have too much pride
it affects us all
in this never ending fall
if you want me to shoot just make the call
i'm done thats all no more talk about falls
and false calls
now run home
don't come back
next time i won't give you so much slack
My mind is ripped torn and shattered
my soul beaten and battered
my thoughts are not straight but skattered
i blame the world
for every word
that comes out of my mouth
as my thoughts head south
screams of murderer as I walk down the street
I mean by the way I'm so broke I barely get money to eat
these stone walls
are the only things i feel when experience the falls
of the life i was given
with me the dead have truly risen
i'll never become nothing
thats what my parents tell me
if thats true why all i see is suffering
on the streets in the news
shildren runnin down the streets with no shoes
who's fault is that who's?
i got these bye baby blues
in this game of life there is only one option
LOSE
come near me
you won't like what you see
you try to hurt my family
son't get by my side
you'll soon learn this jekyll doesn't hide
don't act like you take pain in stride
your problem is you have too much pride
it affects us all
in this never ending fall
if you want me to shoot just make the call
i'm done thats all no more talk about falls
and false calls
now run home
don't come back
next time i won't give you so much slack
techkidd33- no stars
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Re: This my shit
Practice..
I was reading it..N my mind just went somewhere else..So it wasn't very interesting..
Use a different structure..
Basically, your shit was way to simple..
I was reading it..N my mind just went somewhere else..So it wasn't very interesting..
Use a different structure..
Basically, your shit was way to simple..
LykeWise- no stars
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Re: This my shit
not bad though compared to some other people *caughs* lykwise *coughs*
krookedletta- 2 stars
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Re: This my shit
lay off the shrooms, k bro..It's not doing you any good^^
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Re: This my shit
,,,,
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